For this unit our S.A.T was to choose a product and to create an advertisement for it. I chose make up and for make up I did lipstick and a free nail polish. After I did my first draft I showed it to my 9th grade mentor and he told what worked and didn’t work. Then he told me what to change to make it better. After I did my real S.A.T I scanned my first draft and my real S.A.T and send an email to my 9th grade mentor and to Ms.Whitten.
This is what I wrote to my mentor:
I have followed your advices and change the followings:
The words ( Want to be beautiful? Use the new products of True Beauty) I did each letter another color. I didn’t make a star bigger for my real one because it took a lot of the space and looked ugly but I used two stars 1 for the old price and 1 for the new price.
The aspects I changed was the color and the font color. I changed the color of my products because girls use red lipstick a lot and red nail polish would be a great match. I change the font color because it will take more attention. The word choice is good because when teenagers read the words they will think they will get beautiful if they buy these products.
The colors are bad and didn’t come out very good because of the scanner so that’s why the colors are bad.
Thank you a lot for helping me for my advertisement. It was good to work with you. Your advice really will help me with my grade.
Below are my first draft and my real one: